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    dots Submission Name: Mans Greatest Mistakedots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 1000
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 86



    Description:
       Not sure why i wrote this, if i did it right, or what inspired me, just a little something that came to me, oh, say, 5 seconds ago.


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    dotsMans Greatest Mistakedots
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    Mans greatest mistake?
    Biting into the apple.
    Ignorance is bliss




    Submitted on 2010-03-09 14:31:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What does this pertain to? I understand your "description" portion, but you categorize life as a mistake, and portray ignorance as bliss? A cliché is hardly a metaphor, because the cliché has no intent to challenge something. No criticism intended here, I just stumbled onto an interesting conversation, that's all. Thanks for sharing.

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    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by blacksail | [ Reply to This ]
      Short sweet and to the point I guess. Why was it posted seems your not even sure lol. Well I'd have to agree to a point.
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by cyberpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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