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    dots Submission Name: brokendots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    I loved you from the start, with every emotion i contained. I loved you with everything i possessed. with all i had, but sometimes all those things are not good enough.
    Never had my heart been so glad, never had i felt so strong, so alive. Every second spend with you was like a glimpse of heaven- a beautiful preview.
    Even before love was created i was already loving you, not even the love of Romeo and Juliet was as great as mine for you. The notebook contained a passion so great, so much desire and hurt which reminded me of the pain that I've felt for you.The day you walked away, you left me all alone with broken promises, a sorrowed soul, the pieces of my heart laid shattered on the floor.
    Just like the unsinkable Titanic crashed into a cold iceberg and down it went into the ocean floor, my unbreakable heart, was torn apart by you and your evil soul.





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      The more I read the more I respect your work
    This is a cool you write with verve and a predilection
    For hyperbole that I really do like while you are usally
    A tad bit on the macabre side of love's emotion you
    Still hold my interest
    | Posted on 2013-03-26 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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