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    dots Submission Name: Martyrs and Mercenaries dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    There came a moment of anguish
    As delicate beauty
    Nailed to its pink and frilly cross
    Gave a cry which ripped the throat from truth
    And left itself shivering
    Unrepentant

    At least the cross was golden
    And with gilt upon its obsession
    Made it worthy, or so it seemed so
    Of prostitution

    And by flowers and briers
    The intricate writhen
    Of barbed wired ensnares the heart
    And how you fall to your own martyrdom
    But are mercenary to the last

    Cadaverous clown
    How you throw yourself upon love

    Treacherous is which would tip the scales
    Of how much you have
    And how much she thinks; she deserves
    While counting compliments
    On the abacus of esteem
    And never the favour; return

    A chocolate rose can buy a heart

    And with the false pumping of sexual intent
    Seek to count coins
    And martyr love
    Only to weep in a mirror
    And weigh the cost of each precious, astringent tear

    Bold weakness and brave cowards
    Unarmed and delicate swordsmen
    Sell their souls to paper
    And trade themselves to possession
    And simple for comfort
    And simper for luxury
    Never turn to face life without its manufactured security

    The likes of me
    Will pit our wits to willing slavery
    And merely dream and dream endlessly
    Of what could be

    Turn my eyes to its gilded pornography
    To be sold
    By the Martyr and the Mercenary





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      Obvious things I can point out: I love your choice of words. Cadaverous? Yes, indeed you are a wordy one.

    This is powerful in so many ways. This is downright beautiful. You have me stumbling for words beyond that.

    You are one of my favorite authors on this site. Write on. :)
    | Posted on 2010-03-11 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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