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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 503
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Yeah, lot of writing lately. Again, I don't think it really matters, no one gets online here anymore, sigh, this site used to be so cool when I first joined.

    B.J.


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    I wish you would leave
    and I'd never have to see you.
    You won't leave me mentally,
    so leave me physically.
    Get far away from me
    and let me live in peace.
    I never want to see your face
    but everyday I sit and wait,
    waiting for you to turn the corner.
    That warm feeling fills me up
    and I start to smile.
    I want you to go away,
    to never look at me again
    never smile at my jokes.
    To become pointless in my life,
    as I'm sure I am in yours.
    But I put myself in a fantasy land
    and read into what's not there.
    The signs I see aren't real,
    yet I spend hours fantisizing,
    wishing my dream was real.
    Fantasies run through my mind
    as I glance over to you
    or while I wait for you
    to appear around the corner.
    My sick fantasy,
    I wish it would go away.
    I wish you would go away.




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