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    dots Submission Name: Just Plain Janedots
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    Author: mistiekidd
    ASL Info:    31 like it f Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 37/48/65
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 365
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1192



    Description:
       I'm writing about how I think most women have felt at one point or another. About feeling
    like your surrounde by girls with perfect makeup, clothes, and the perfect man and how out of place that can make you feel.


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    dotsJust Plain Janedots
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    I hate this, but I have no say.
    So suprize baby girl, here it is,
    all your pain, failures, what if's,
    all of it driving you insane.
    You have been touched, hurt,
    laughed at, shamed, you know you'll
    never ever be the same.
    Do not be dumb, you'll never recover.
    You're a soul lost that no one is coming
    to find, your not worth the trouble,
    or the waste of time.
    This is you lost and all alone, you'll
    never be loved the way you deserve.
    Love is lost for you, it was a once upon
    a time, now it's a wish a dream you'll never find! Accept it, no one is coming to find you.
    You've ran and thought you found a
    safe place, now you sit and cry because
    your such a waste.
    Your nothing but an afterthought,
    the girl whose name will be forgot.
    You were always so different, sad
    mad,wrong, never strong, always
    so easy to be picked on.
    An ordinary girl with no backbone.
    An ordinary, plain, dull girl, never
    percieved as a women or pretty.
    Just someone to hate, blame to be forgot!




    Submitted on 2010-03-10 20:16:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oddly enough, I'm not a girl and I have felt out of place myself. Like I don't belong here. Haha. maybe it's something everyone feels?

    Where that cursed reminder that out there is someone better, and that you're merely a shadow of that bigger better person.

    Maybe.

    As for the poem itself, I found that you needed some pauses here and there, and you have some rhyme. Was that accidental? ha. It may just be how I pronounce things. Other than that, it was a good piece. Thanks for sharing my friend.
    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]


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