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    dots Submission Name: Little Voices in my Headdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 468
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       Yay, another. Seems as if my writer's block is truly gone. Thats good, even if no one is online anymore. Well, enjoy, please comment. and have a nice day.

    B.J.


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    dotsLittle Voices in my Headdots
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    I'm losing my mind.
    Little voices in my head
    Telling me to jump,
    just go overboard.
    I don't want to listen
    to the evil voices
    that haunt my sleep
    and sound throughout the day.
    The voice scares me,
    the voice is yours!
    No, no go away.
    Take your evil thoughts
    and whispered wishes
    and leave me be.
    Physically, you act so
    nonchalant.
    But mentally,
    in my disturbed mind,
    you whisper my name
    over and over again.
    And everytime I respond
    when I want to ignore,
    I should ignore.
    You shouldn't be in
    my thoughts today,
    or tomorrow or ever.
    Keep your little voices away
    I want my sanity.
    The little voices
    keep whispering
    and taunting.
    Telling me to jump
    off of the ledge.
    I know I shouldn't.
    But in my dreams
    I jump every night.




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      That last line stayed with me since last night.
    ...mark of a daaamn good writer.
    Keep it up.
    ~Syn
    | Posted on 2011-06-29 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very incredible write sweetie.. It is deep even while the subject is laid out for any reader to see..
    It flows nicely even without a specific rhyme scheme..
    Nicely done..
    | Posted on 2010-04-03 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      You write as though you know exactly who it is that torments you. This does not seem so much suicidal as it does deciduous...as if, perhaps, you've finally attained a place you've been working towards.

    This piece of writing gains steam towards the end, it reads very literally in format, no real complexities beyond the internal message. I believe the foundation for this and perhaps more of your writing is this "evil voice"? I look forward to reading more of your writing, thanks for sharing.

    BI
    | Posted on 2010-03-11 00:00:00 | by blacksail | [ Reply to This ]


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