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Lost in each other

Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Lost in each other

Tangled up in the bed sheets
We lose ourselves in each other
Giving away all that we have
Promising to never love another

Our lips meet with such a force
That our teeth clash together
Your arms wrapped around me
I could feel safe here forever

Your body’s rocking motion
Sweat dripping off your chest
Our hearts beating like a drum
Until finally we must rest

Laying naked side by side
Never wanting the night to end
We stare into each others eyes
Knowing no other love could contend

Submitted on 2010-03-11 12:32:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i thought this was good, mixed with the right quantity of creativity with quality of imagery, well done.
| Posted on 2010-03-12 00:00:00 | by premiumpg | [ Reply to This ]
  Ohhh I love this one!! it give me little goosebumps when it rhymed! :) short and sweet!
| Posted on 2010-03-11 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]

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