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    dots Submission Name: Mirrors of Sorrowdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 380
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMirrors of Sorrowdots
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    The deepest echo
    The faces of pain
    Stare me down from their mirrors of sorrow
    And their hollow refrain

    They look to me
    Want me to let them live again
    In their emptiness to feel
    They want me to remain

    And they look to you from the shadows
    From the darkest pits they devise
    To taint all your laughter
    And hide behind your eyes

    Eating your heart
    For the tears that you’ve shed
    Crashed to the bottom
    The pools of blood that you’ve bled

    A cry of anguish circles the world
    The piteous voice, the scream of a child
    You stare me down from these mirrors of pain
    And bid me live with their hollow refrain

    It is in your dungeon
    No one can see
    To reach out someone
    And tell them, this emptiness is not me

    It is with the eyes of stars I have walked
    And in beauty left my lingering thought
    And with your sighs
    With Gods we have talked

    Staggered in colour, we paint how to be
    The child of our heart
    In the flight of our love
    The freedoms ballet

    But from the deepest echo
    Come the faces of pain
    Stare down from their mirrors of sorrow
    With their hollow refrain

    They look to me
    Want me to make them live again
    In their emptiness to feel
    They want me to remain

    They look from our shadows
    From the treacherous pits of their lies
    To break all our laughter
    And hide behind our eyes





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