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    dots Submission Name: Eyesdots
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    Author: Kitkara
    ASL Info:    19, Female, and in MO
    Elite Ratio:    6.63 - 25/25/15
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 513
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Mmm... I love seeing people through their eyes... Dedication to Robert.


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    dotsEyesdots
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    Eyes are like Moons,
    full,
    half rimmed.

    Eyes are like Diamonds,
    sparkling,
    clear.

    Eyes are like Oceans,
    deep,
    lush.

    Eyes are like Words,
    speaking,
    emotion.

    Eyes are like Fresh Rain,
    trickling,
    tearing.

    Eyes are like Cameras,
    seeing,
    filming.

    Eyes are like Love,
    caring,
    compassionate.

    Eyes, are like Suns,
    bright,
    cheerful.

    Eyes are Beautiful,
    colorful,
    different.

    My eyes are Blue,
    deep,
    loving.

    His eyes are Green,
    compassionate,
    clear.

    Your eyes...

    Well, those are yours... :)




    Submitted on 2010-03-11 18:52:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this, the repetition, the description, and just all of it, I always find it awkward when my eyes give it away, but I guess it makes more sense after reading this, the eyes are a window into the soul, and very true, my eyes are mine
    | Posted on 2011-02-20 00:00:00 | by Abass | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason all of the repitition made me eager to see the end of this poem. I'm not sure if the suspense was intentional or not, but good work nonetheless.


    I like the truth in some of the verses,
    'Eyes are like cameras,
    seeing,
    filming.'
    and this one caught my interest most, for what ever reason. In any case, I thought the poem ended on a humerous and nice note.
    | Posted on 2010-03-29 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]


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