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    dots Submission Name: Dont Touch Me with your Minddots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I don't know, this isn't for me or you to know. Listened to the Black Ghosts while writing. Its true the repetition does kill you.


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    dotsDont Touch Me with your Minddots
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    Dont,
    Just dont,......
    I can feel you thinking of me from here,
    Green eyes out of hollow skull,
    Ocular cavities,
    Eyes,
    Defensive machines,
    Observing my approach,
    Alerting the body to the threat,
    the threat of belief,
    of touch,
    of love of something,
    the redeemable,
    the too much grasp,
    of your woebegone lover,
    the encumbrance,
    the mantle of love that you used to wear,
    has been discarded on the field of battle,
    a superfluous fraction of its,
    almost former self,
    your fingertips,
    grinding into the cold side of the pillow,
    the skeleton of a baby caught on wavelengths,
    future sounds invade the soporific dreamscape.





    Submitted on 2010-03-12 08:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      knowing you better personally, I can understand this better. and I hope you have faith in good things regardless of the negative. I'm pulling for you, colby cheese.
    | Posted on 2010-03-17 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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