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    dots Submission Name: Last goodbyedots
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    Author: cyberpoet
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 28/18/22
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 695
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 968



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    dotsLast goodbyedots
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    Taciturn person,
    Meager voice,
    Silently enduring,
    The pain of lost hope
    Faithless As ever
    Hope faded and
    You’re blinded by pain
    In my eyes you were the one
    To bring me hope when I was lost
    Wish you knew before you were gone
    Maybe you wouldn't have taken your life
    That day I cleaned out my locker
    I was where you were
    You saw a kid knock down my stuff
    You were the only one
    To help me pick it up
    You asked to hang
    We became friends
    What you didn't know
    That day and my life
    I was going to end
    But you showed me your friendship
    And now you’re gone
    I wish I could have done the same
    But now you’re gone
    Maybe if you only knew
    You saved my life
    You would still be here
    But know you’re gone
    And here I weep
    Crying over you
    My only friend




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