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    dots Submission Name: Statue.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsStatue.dots
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    Iíve got a written expression
    Carved into stone skin.
    Chisel out this ache in the cracking smile.

    Iíve stared past a thousand miles, and you understand well enough that my hands can no longer move.
    My feet youíve left in a bated triumph, but starting to perish from the rain.
    Where is my master? Lord? Where are your controlling eyes?
    For I stand here alone; even the birds no longer grace my ears.




    Submitted on 2010-03-12 13:58:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm. Is it a metaphor? Or a simple observation? It's very well done, I like this :)
    Keep writing!
    <3
    | Posted on 2010-03-27 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]


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