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    dots Submission Name: My Breeddots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
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    Bytes: 1157



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    dotsMy Breeddots
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    MY BREED
    The Airports are constantly watched
    customs and emigrations have the seaports and borders under close surveilance
    Every hotel regardless of the star rating has my description.
    The Government regularly holds close door sessions at odd hours,
    even in their mighty offices they are panicky!

    Word spreads like wildfire,every document from confidential to car park receipts
    are kept under lock and key.
    General belief is that I am a freedom fighter,but they rever me a lone individual
    as if I am a movement.

    They suspect my visit,whether its holidaying or investigative,they fear if I come,I will ask
    and then I will try to understand and inevitably soon,I WRITE.
    Cyber gurus have being contracted to firewall my Account so I cant Login,
    large unexplainable sums have made their presence felt in my bank account.

    With Indian,Latino,African beauties,offering me the choice of the land
    they have sought to appease me.
    Why? ... its because they know my breed.
    They know; that I am a member of ELITESKILLS




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      Sharp, intelligent, scathing, and above all, real in that way borne of experience which can't be made up out of thin air.

    You have fire. Conviction. And soul.

    Stuff like this makes me glad to read and write.
    If only because my eyes are re-opened.
    And made to see the light.
    | Posted on 2010-05-15 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it. it was so cool! I loved how you worded it.
    -Rachel(:
    | Posted on 2010-03-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      Understand the feeling.
    | Posted on 2010-03-13 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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