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    dots Submission Name: I promisedots
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    Author: phsycoticangel
    ASL Info:    17/F/Aus
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 23/42/37
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 575
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 898



    Description:
       When my parents got divorced My father and I decided that it was us against the world. Just recently I've had to fight with him over little things that my mother or my brothers want him to do and he said that no one supports him. I feel horrible for having seemingly turned my back on him. So I wrote this for him.


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    dotsI promisedots
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    I know you've always had my back
    And I used to have yours to
    But now it's all just turned around
    Why did I do this to you?
    I swear its not what it looks like
    I still understand your side
    But they just cant stand up to you
    Its in me that they confide
    I know it seems like i dont care
    Like your facing them alone
    I wish i could apologise
    I just cant pick up the phone
    I have gone back on everything
    When she left we made a deal
    I didnt think we'd be like this
    It just doesnt feel quite real
    I love you and I am still here
    I hope you can understand
    I know I've screwed it up alot
    But still, its with you i stand
    Until the end of tomorrow
    Tomorrow will never come
    No matter what comes, i promise
    You will be my number one




    Submitted on 2010-03-13 09:59:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this piece.
    the overall depth and meaning to it.


    Your grammar could use a little work, but i'm not one whom should comment on that being i use spell check for everything and anything.


    I can't say i know what your going through being my parents are happy together and have been for over thirty years.
    but, i know divorces can be tough; and millions of kids experiance them.

    Out of the entire thing.
    I loved this line.


    No matter what comes, i promise
    You will be my number one


    You captured the feeling quite nicely.



    You shouldn't feel like you've turned your back on him. It's tough choosing sides' with family. Tough trying to have both of them love you equally. Toygh trying not to break, when they depend on you to stay strong.



    I think you'll do allright.
    Hang in there kid.



    -Jace
    | Posted on 2010-03-14 00:00:00 | by TasteMyRainbow | [ Reply to This ]


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