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    dots Submission Name: Mendots

    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 357
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       My first real date in over a year and a half..it was kind of amazing..wanted to commemorate it somehow.. :)

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    Obligatory withdrawal
    Testosterone rubrics cube
    (you think you've pulled ahead in this race)
    Second glances caught on tape
    Can't hide how you feel when you feel it
    (I saw your fidgets when you wanted my hand)
    Silently saying everything
    Verbally acknowledging every fault
    (I hear what you don't say, my dear)
    Hard as stone
    Sweet as honey
    (can I lean on you for a while?)
    Soft like a razor
    Rug burn to the facial region
    (that's when you should have kissed me)
    Gut reaction to a spark
    Hiding behind walls
    (I see you)
    Emotional black hole
    Sunshine in summer
    (warm up my chilled bones)
    Wasted time with games
    I won you all the same
    (would you expecting anything less?)

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      drunk at five in the morning in texas is no time to respond to the words youve written, nevertheless i find myself in just such a position. I love this, i really do, thank you for this, its both hilarious and somehow depressing i really cant put my hand or fingers upon it.
    Thank daft punk and bitenburger beer for this comment, otherwise i would be asleep like any other good souther boy.

    colby w. bradshaw
    | Posted on 2010-03-14 00:00:00 | by colbybradshaw | [ Reply to This ]

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