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    dots Submission Name: we write the worst with porpoiseful mislabelingsdots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 480
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    dotswe write the worst with porpoiseful mislabelingsdots
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    get out of here,
    with that glamorama disgust glance,
    take the lacquer off of your eyes,
    descend with me into the bathroom,
    let us powder our noses,
    electrodes track our,
    every synaptic desire,
    every orgasm,
    is a pulse on a screen,
    a recognizable signal,
    to some freak bastard,
    whose life it is to understand your wants,
    and desires,
    and no,
    he doesn't love you,
    merely corporate courting,
    pulsation,
    not that it was pertinent,
    not that we ever felt anything,
    it was some philisophical plagiarism,
    spell check bullshit,
    and everyone saying,
    nooooo,
    don't say this,
    blow me,
    i miss the pool cue,
    im not good at breaking the shits,
    people observe us wondering if,
    when i get home ill pass out,
    apparent not so huh>?,
    I'm writing just to be bad at this point,
    disgusting cybernetic fascist.





    Submitted on 2010-03-14 06:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You get out of here and powder your nose. Hahaa! You're an intellectual, sarcastic pioneer of breaking your own mold.

    I enjoyed this, especially coming from you. Your works are always so..formal? Formally techniqued? I don't know how to put it. It's nice to see you rebel a little with excessive comma usage and poor spelling.

    Thanks for posting Monsieur Bradshaw. Très bien.
    | Posted on 2010-03-14 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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