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    dots Submission Name: The Year In Albert Squaredots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Joke/Comedy
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    dotsThe Year In Albert Squaredots
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    Time to take stock of the past.
    Murders left behind.
    Deaths of the year, to excell,
    bodies left to find.
    But let's not forget about the living,
    the characters left to die.
    Albert's Square is a lovely place,
    and let me tell you why:

    You have the Mitchel family; plus newbies,
    (the hardnuts of the bunch).
    There's the Slater union; Kat's family,
    (who break down in a crunch).

    And let's not forget about Jean Slater,
    who is obviously, a greater actor.
    Than that guy who plays Charlie Slater,
    who can never seem to cry.
    He never seems to cry...

    Phillip hit the bottle again,
    Ben wonders why.
    Darren revealed to be the dad;
    he tapped Heather's pie.
    But let's no forget about the others,
    Mas stealing post.
    Walford is a lovely place,
    so let's raise a toast!

    You have the Beales; plus "Peter",
    (the push over's of the square).
    Then there's the Brannings; minus Bradley,
    (known for his ginger hair).

    But let's not forget about Jean Slater,
    who is obviously, a greater actor.
    Than that guy who plays Charlie Slater,
    who just never seems to try.
    He never seems to try...

    In the live show we saw,
    some people just couldn't act.
    Bradley's uncle, named Jack,
    Announced, "the-fac-from-the-plac-t."
    But let's not forget about the others,
    Zaynab's special "brown sauce".
    Albert Square is a lovely place,
    the greatest, unstoppable force.

    You have the Masood family; plus Syed,
    (who gave Christian some meat.)
    Then there's the Butcher group, add Janine,
    Archie's former treat.

    Oh let's not forget about Jean Slater,
    who is obviously, a greater actor.
    Than that guy who plays Charlie Slater,
    whose performances are so dry.
    They're always so, so dry...




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      Well it made me smile. :D
    I like the repitition.

    Carrie:)
    | Posted on 2010-04-21 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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