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    dots Submission Name: My life, demiseddots
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    Author: XSilencingHerX
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    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    dotsMy life, demiseddots
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    Where once was,
    There is no more.
    Torn pages of an empty book,
    Full of empty words,
    I will crush your heart,
    The way you crushed my world.
    No saving us now.
    These bitter strings,
    This jelouse sound.
    I live for your illusion.
    It poured from you lips like honey.

    This is not love,
    Only momentary lust.
    Nothing more than,
    Another mistake made by us.
    Never an ever after.
    This existence was a lie.
    A wolf of deciet,
    Still cleaverly disguised.

    I've felt this pain.
    I've seen so much.
    I signed with oh's and ex's
    Love is lost,
    Lust is found.
    I've drown with all these hexes.
    No saving us now.
    These bitter strings,
    This jelouse sound.
    I live for your illusion.
    It poured from your lips like honey.

    Love is lost.
    Love is lost.
    Love is lost.

    My heart.
    My soul.
    My life, demised.




    Submitted on 2010-03-15 05:18:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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