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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 593
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    Description:
       everything breaks then mends this is one of those stories


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    dotsLovedots
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    love
    by Hilary Coury
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    I find new feelings deep within,
    past the previous temptations of sin.
    I now view life through unteared eyes,
    and wonder now how I ever cried.

    I know now freedom and what it brings,
    like the ability to surpass idle things.
    I have been released and asprung anew,
    I found love and some sort of faith plus truth.

    I once was oppressed by such silly things;
    like other people and what they think.
    But subtract the masses drugged at large,
    and find yourself being a true star.

    All you need is love in your heart like so many others have said,
    but the love I speak of is for you.
    And not intended for the one in your bed.





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