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    dots Submission Name: Saturday in the Dead Souled Nightscapedots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 532
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    dotsSaturday in the Dead Souled Nightscapedots
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    Cars scraping and scratching,
    the exhaust,
    the salary floating out of clenched fists,
    the commodity of ideology,
    faux friendship hugs,
    Its sure has been awhile,
    yes,
    yes it sure has,
    and we still have nothing to say,
    But your eyes were blue,
    a mirror of turquoise,
    from which,
    to eviscerate my vanity,
    trying to come to grips with the fallacy of our chance meeting,
    has given me a horrible headache,
    I wish that i,
    could trade two yesterdays,
    for another tonight,
    the iron taste in my mouth,
    is inexcusable,
    no way to be exonerated,
    in a court presided over by yourself,
    all lefts dont make a right,
    all the lights are flashing,
    orange and red,
    symbols,
    that have come to mean,
    both something and nothing,
    I want to curl myself around this idea,
    and nurture it with the inexplicable milk of my multiple denials,
    But ideas,
    do not breathe,
    do not reciprocate,
    cannot love,
    cannot embrace,
    this impersonal night,
    this Gogolesque monstrosity,
    surrounded on all sides by the amorphous,
    the guilt ridden shadow,
    that stalks you like an assasin,
    a reminder,
    constantly of the past,
    of the night ,
    the night where you drop your mask,
    and embrace the savage,
    the wicked beast,
    pleasure,
    pleasure,
    plesssure,
    prrrressssure.




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