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    dots Submission Name: stand asidedots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       not one of my strongest writes but it needed to come out.


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    dotsstand asidedots
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    I begged to be her shield
    to find only refusal
    learning she fears now sword

    So Ill stand aside
    strength untested

    Pray she doesn't fall
    and guilt won't consume
    because this heart is willing to bleed

    So I'll stand aside
    ready to run if needed

    I begged to be her sword
    to find only refusal
    learning she'll fight her own

    So I'll stand aside
    I'll stand aside

    Pray she doesn't fall
    and guilt wont consume
    because this heart is already bleeding

    I begged to be her sword, her shield
    to find only refusal
    learning I am not yet the man she deserves

    So I'll stand aside
    pray she doesn't fall
    because even though I begged
    I can't promise to catch her




    Submitted on 2010-03-16 22:43:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're more than willing to be her martyr, right? I know that feeling; and the refusal that comes along with it to.

    "I begged to be her sword, her shield
    to find only refusal
    learning I am not yet the man she deserves"

    Don't regrade yourself my friend, it brings no good. besides, the fact that you're willing to "Bleed" for her shows you're more than she deserves. At least in my eyes, none the less.

    Keep your chin up soldier; there are millions of fish in the sea. because it doesn't work, there's no need to doubt yourself. You're strong, you'll fight, and soon you'll find someone deserving of your shield and sword.
    | Posted on 2010-03-28 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]
      i am more than sure by now your strength has been tested... just not by her perhaps?
    i have seen you go through a whole lot of strength proving moments in life though i havent been close enough to know what they actually were but i am more than sure that you have come out the other end of them strengthened and refined.


    girls. i dont know about them. us. we try to fight our own battles because we think we are amazing and we think we are strong and we think we need to prove this by fighting alone. im becoming less and less convinced that this is a good sound practice.



    i think this man is onto something..

    id rather find out who you are than who youre not..

    im thinking... hoping... that when you say youre not the man she deserves that youre saying shes not good enough for you...
    i think you are amazing and i think you need to start believing me because i know what im talking about...

    be safe john.
    | Posted on 2010-03-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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