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    dots Submission Name: Your Bitchdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 537
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 549



    Description:
       This is from an upcoming poem book I am writing titled "Nasty" I posted this to see what kind of reaction it receives...


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    dotsYour Bitchdots
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    Fuck fame
    I just want you
    And nothing more

    Such a shame
    It must be for you
    Too bad you have a whore

    Married, separated I don’t give a fuck
    I want you now, with no love
    No boundaries, no obligations
    Just you, and your attention
    Is that too much
    To ask for
    Probably not like
    Your whore

    I just want to be your bitch
    No ties, no boundaries, no obligations
    We’ll kill whoever snitch
    Leave them with no salvation




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