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    dots Submission Name: I want you to be minedots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       And again, sigh.

    B.J.


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    dotsI want you to be minedots
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    I wish I could talk to you
    and tell you that I shouldn't have.
    That everything was a mistake.
    The thoughts going through
    my head all about you
    should not have been there.
    I shouldn't have go on
    and played along with your game.
    I should have stopped
    and went away from you.
    I should have told you to stop.
    But I didn't stop you.
    I fed into your game,
    and played along with you.
    And nothing changed in me.
    I still want you.
    I didn't get it out of my system.
    Now I just want more of you.
    I can be called crazy,
    but I don't want to let go.
    You're not mine
    but I want you to be.
    I want your words to be a reality.
    I want to tell you this,
    but it is so wrong,
    and I already know this.
    I can't have you
    and it makes me want you more.
    You would give me my way
    and let me have you,
    but someone will get hurt,
    and that's not fair.
    But i'm dying inside
    from this longing deep within.
    I want you.
    I want to devour you
    until there is nothing left.
    I want you to be mine.




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is quite the emotional piece. And I understand every line that is in it. So much I'm actually going to favor this.

    Do know; it brings no good to give yourself up to someone who doesn't want you in that way. What else would happen but you'd be used? Don't put yourself out in the open, and that's about all I can say. Things you already know, none the less. >.>

    I cannot say there is something I'd change, but I do feel as if something was missing. What did you do? How did you play along? Things of that nature. You know, to make it more personal.

    Well, that's all for me. Keep your chin up, my friend
    | Posted on 2010-03-28 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]
      A most passionate lover's lament here... nicely done... bravo!
    | Posted on 2010-03-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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