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    dots Submission Name: aruguladots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 375
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    water moves forward despite me
    while the chanterelle moves backwards
    through my breath, unable to describe itself
    without knowing the essence of the tree bark, primrose
    & the sweet pink of an ocean salt
    mixed lovingly with a riverís bed.

    & the mulch of my under-darling continues always..

    the forest is its own market,
    always providing for itself from itself.

    when i ask a creek of its destination,
    it quietly remarks that it remembers me,
    like a lost trout or a bit of algae
    once stuck between its pebbly teeth forever.

    & there are songs of passion
    amongst the leaves
    describing how i once adored you,
    a goat that climbed a tree
    instead of offering me its cheese;
    a radish, in its competition with a beet
    that never saw the beauty of the blueberry
    that it ignored
    or the bread of the morningís airey yeasts rising..

    & though we donít know it
    we taste it,
    & we drink it..

    when all else fails,
    we split forth from ourselves
    like roots informed of dying
    from the stem
    while the herbs & the spices of our bodies-lovely
    continue living through our flesh.

    we all come together in the end;
    food, pheasants & lovers of the bone..

    & we find peace amongst the islands of our tongues revealing..





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      I thought this was a bit of a trip, again, I wonder what sort of drugs you take, but mostly out of envy. you put this out there and right out there.... i wondered whether you'd be able to bring it back. but you did, and that's something I regularly find on this page, things tied in, pleasing rhythms and a pan's labyrinth you just don't find on other's pages.

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