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    dots Submission Name: Chef Scalesdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Prose/Satire
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       It's not suicide, more like time travel.

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    dotsChef Scalesdots

    On a tall tall ceiling with a parched mouth and a dirty
    glance my way,
    Hershey's melted kisses on the tip of a lizards tongue

    stirring soup with the tip of his scaly fingers and
    finding himself out on the bay of another world he hadn't come from

    with a little bit of will and a small sliver of sun coming in from a crack in the blinds he reserved his hope
    to grow

    bottled at the pit of his stomach and sealed shut with bases and mixtures of digested wealth

    this emotion he had squirreled away made a nice dream for him and for those who slept

    his eyes dry and awake and always awake
    never slept
    without saying it he didn't know if he was ever conscious

    and so with one last prayer and a turn of the dial on the stove he hopped inside to preheat
    and god willing sleep

    Submitted on 2010-03-18 14:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-03-20 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I too think this is quite a unique and good piece. Really cannot offer any words of wisdom as I find it difficult to articulate what I am feeling. I do know it is well thought out and worded. I like it alot.

    yours in Christ
    | Posted on 2010-03-19 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, this is most arcane, indeed! lizards and kitchens and suicide-time travel! One of a kind, I am absolutely certain of that... an origianl, no question about it!!!
    | Posted on 2010-03-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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