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    dots Submission Name: Dried Rosesdots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDried Rosesdots
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    Gail please don't leave
    with those tears upon your skin
    ....................I can't breath
    As your shadow grows smaller
    and swirling dust settles
    on dead petals of the dry red roses
    I bought you one sunny day
    ...................when everything was OK
    Memories pose like queer manikins
    in the windows of ordinary life.
    Naked to the eye and sheltered to the soul
    unfolded to expose the creases
    ...................we shared life
    And pain distilled by fear until clear
    and still we walk in separate directions
    like positives and negatives
    always in the search for what is
    ....................and what will never be again.





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