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    dots Submission Name: Crystal Child ( Chrysalides )dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCrystal Child ( Chrysalides )dots
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    This communication is so weak
    Repeats
    Everything from which I departed

    You riddle me within your words
    Another language

    And sometimes I want to return
    I want to leave here
    But I have a message you need to learn
    And so I stay

    I canít keep the definitions which you place
    On the world around you

    This communication is so weak
    Cannot form the speech
    Tongue tied I out grew

    Though I am just a child
    So much is remembered
    I know so much more
    Than you

    And you cannot see the smile behind my eyes
    Translate its truth

    Itís the world I know will be
    Itís something that I see
    Do you ?

    All I remember is the many lives
    I have relinquished
    All the words mean nothing
    They are not free

    I cannot be the definition in which you place
    Me
    They cannot communicate me

    This communication is so weak
    Why
    Do
    You
    Have
    To
    Speak






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