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    dots Submission Name: Consciencedots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 429
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 328



    Description:
       ...um.. yeah. It doesn't work very well does it ?


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    dotsConsciencedots
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    You cry and fabricate me from within
    I walk and paint you from here

    We are just like a sheet of paper
    You're the back, and I am the front.

    I walk backwards
    Today you're the front.

    So don't cry too much,
    Paint on your own happy face.




    Submitted on 2010-03-19 12:40:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cute but short & unrelated. I donno maybe it's me, u needed to open up more and give more details it's just a bliss poem to me sorry :)
    | Posted on 2010-03-19 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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