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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this while bringing my kids to school one morning. It just hit me. Wrote it in about 10 minutes. So if it is bad you know why.


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    dotsHaikudots
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    Begone winter's grip
    Lands awaken from slumber
    Rejoice in new birth!




    Submitted on 2010-03-19 13:36:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see this was written in march. I'm always ready for spring by then also. This is not at all bad. Haiku is really hard to make totally new and creative, but I do like this. It's usually my exact sentiment come February.
    | Posted on 2016-01-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      attack of the clone
    the funny clown is crazy
    immolation protest... onegood line
    | Posted on 2010-03-20 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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