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    dots Submission Name: Where?dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWhere?dots
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    I canít see past this one
    This once was an unseen barrier
    Between what was real, written, unseen and simply thought.
    And as I grasped a hold of the handle,
    It suddenly disappeared into thin air,
    Making me believe it was never really there,
    But then what was that support it gave?

    Itís like if you had an eyeball,
    That couldnít really see,
    But with how it functions no problems were seen!
    Though, still your vision was like a blank screen.




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