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    dots Submission Name: Tourbillon Immortalitydots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTourbillon Immortalitydots
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    Tourbillon turn back what holds me down.
    A perfectly polished escapement, shimmering brilliantly in my eyes, oh how grand it feels to be one with life.
    Ticking, a melody that everyone seems to forget is true beauty.
    For I am he which can always be.

    Tourbillon




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