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    dots Submission Name: What I think of this SHIT ASS Sight!!!!dots

    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    2.7500
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    dotsWhat I think of this SHIT ASS Sight!!!!dots

    Clique-ish split ends
    frayed friends
    spend countless hours
    in cyber therapy
    crying about
    self appointed
    pose like overweight models
    unable to hear the laughing
    through the static of there idealistic cantor
    Hear one, hear all
    why should I listen to the unripe fruit
    of a child fed by frustration not occurrence
    Life lessons from the tender feet of who..you,
    I think not
    My feet are worn from life scorn
    vengeance and penance
    vengeance and penance
    vengeance and penance
    that's the circle of life
    I pledge allegiance to life, love and belly buttons the rest of you can piss off
    and creep back into your
    crawl space of an existence
    the closed walls of your life
    are the coffins of your empty tomorrows

    Submitted on 2010-03-19 22:05:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this is amazing i love the rant you didn't miss a single thing DAM... this is deff a Fav great rant hope it helped :)

    | Posted on 2010-04-03 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
    I love this, fan[censored]tastic, you captured the ES experiance, wonderful.
    I read this in hopes that your talent would back your contempt for this site, and it did, creative, and witty, and you did not miss a beat.

    my favorite line would be, "Why should I listen to the unripe fruit of a child led by frustration not occurrence"

    nice.... this site is teen angst on steroids,

    good stuff

    | Posted on 2010-03-20 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]

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