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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots

    Author: Segniust
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 74/33/8
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Rays of light kissed the young maiden's head,

    As her sorrow filled the emptiness in her heart,

    She had treaded the earth alone for far too long,

    And her life was starting to quickly fall away,

    She remembered all the lovers she burried,

    All the people she watched die in battle,

    And all the towns that were burned to ruins,

    She remembered the bloodshed and brutality,

    The widows that cried over their lost husbands,

    The children that cowered in fear of being taken,

    The warriors that laughed at everyone's pitiful state,

    Yet, she had grown accustomed to the torture,

    She was used to the pain and screaming,

    She desired the thrill of running for her life,

    And she wanted to seek revenge many times,

    But things had changed and her heart was weary,

    She belonged to noone and claimed no family line,

    She had no past, present, or future to think of,

    For she was just a lost soul in search of a home,

    She was just lost in a world of darkness,

    Like a traveller with no path or direction,

    Like a sailor with no wheel to steer his ship,

    Or like a child in search of his mother,

    She was alone with nothing to keep her company,

    But maybe she was comfortable with that now,

    Maybe she did not want anyone's help,

    Maybe she just wanted to be lost forever..

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