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    dots Submission Name: Dear Frienddots
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    Author: Segniust
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 74/33/8
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1077
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 661



    Description:
       To those who have had special friends out there. I hope you find them again.


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    dotsDear Frienddots
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    Time has passed us by,
    And we've grown farther apart,
    But the age old friendship we had,
    Has never left my heart,

    I admit I've made mistakes,
    And my actions have been wrong,
    But I truley must confess,
    That I wish this wasn't so long,

    My eyes are on the clock,
    Counting every tiny second,
    And it seems like forever,
    Since the last time we've spoken,

    So I want to tell you now,
    Even if you don't think it's true,
    You'll always be a special friend,
    And I hope life goes well for you,





    Submitted on 2010-03-21 20:41:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the subject, and can empathize on the feeling. So much is given to romantic love in poetry, that the platonic love two people can share is too often overlooked.

    As for the structure of the piece, the format is well laid out, but there are a few easily corrected mis-steps:

    In the third line of the second stanza(?) truly is misspelled and in the last line of the poem you put a comma instead of a period, leaving it open ended where it shouldn't be.

    Blu

    | Posted on 2010-03-22 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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