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    dots Submission Name: the stormdots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       just a little something. I am a little rusty so forgive me if it isn't quite right


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    dotsthe stormdots
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    The night sky creeps over me
    As black and terrifying as the sea

    I lay awake tonight
    And watch the clouds grow
    dark and dim
    As the trees shake with fright

    I lay awake tonight
    Listening to Thunder's crash
    and shake
    The sky unaware of it's plight

    I lay awake tonight
    And dream of lightening bugs
    forever dancing
    In the storm with all their might

    I lay awake tonight
    And feel the rumbling of the storm
    inside me
    While you hold me tight




    Submitted on 2010-03-22 23:10:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *lightning

    Other than that, it made me think of anticipation. Fear of the future. Something inevitable. It made me sad.

    That is all I have to say about that.
    | Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by Derrick Thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      There is something about a Thunderstorm that sometimes seems so human; perhaps because it is so intense and seems uncontrollably passionate! This was excellent, and it moved the reader the way storms and passions are meant to!

    Nice work Kitten!
    | Posted on 2010-03-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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