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Shatter


Author: Midorininja
ASL Info:    16/secret/Michigan
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 6 /9 /11
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 634
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Shatter



A love that I have yet to choose,
Has me hidden, sad, and confused.
There is nothing to be done,
Just pick them out, one by one.
I may have a chance,
If I step out on the branch.
But what will it matter
If I fall and shatter?




Submitted on 2010-03-23 06:56:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thank you.
| Posted on 2010-05-14 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]
  Even though this was short poem it did explain quite a bit and I admire that one can speak so few words and it says a whole story. As I did read this over i actually felt a bit of emotion. So I must say you did a perfect job of writing this. I felt the emotion you used when you wrote it....or so i beleive :)
| Posted on 2010-03-23 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]


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