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Those Eyes

Author: Midorininja
ASL Info:    16/secret/Michigan
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 6 /9 /11
Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Those Eyes

What does she see
In those cold, dark eyes?
In which he smiled
As a clever disguise.
She melts at his feet.
He crushes her heart.
She cries in defeat.
He slowly tears her world apart.

Submitted on 2010-03-23 06:59:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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