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Will She Smile Again?

Author: Midorininja
ASL Info:    16/secret/Michigan
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 6 /9 /11
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Will She Smile Again?

Will she smile again?
He broke her heart.
She cried in her hands
As her world fell apart.
When her scars have healed,
A new love comes along.
She glows brighter than before.
It all becomes the same old song.
She holds him tight,
He rids the world of all her troubles.
He pushes her away.
Before she knows it, the pain has doubled.
Will she smile again?
He broke her heart.
She cries in her hands.
He watches her world fall apart.

Submitted on 2010-03-23 07:01:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was to my best friend. xD
| Posted on 2010-05-14 00:00:00 | by Midorininja | [ Reply to This ]
  Good writing. Sometimes I think love is not worth looking for.
| Posted on 2010-03-31 00:00:00 | by YC013 | [ Reply to This ]

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