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    dots Submission Name: What is there in a name?dots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhat is there in a name?dots
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    What is there is a name?

    You watched me so intensely, so marvelously
    Hitting my somnolent abyss -
    Ripples across the bottom -
    With each flutter.

    And then when you leaned in, exploding pupils -
    My testament of Big Bang,
    Galaxies gasped -
    Those first -and other- tearing breaths
    Pain
    Left
    Over
    As cosmic memento.

    Understand,
    what is there in a name? My name

    Is rolling on your tongue, do you feel it?
    The gentle circumference
    Upon an apple-scented depth.
    Upon a tip, you trickster,
    You hold me,
    rescinding gravitation
    In between my knees.






    Submitted on 2010-03-23 08:44:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      :) I like this and would write more about it but I can't stop laughing at Daniel's comment. He's like a kid discovering that: There is porn on the internet! :D
    | Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting. The imagery is very alive and vivid. It speaks of the intensity of an intimate moment without being over-sensual - and leaves just enough to the imagination to keep it interesting. I thought that the comparative analogy of the beginning of the universe was orignal and unique. Enjoyed reading it, thank you.
    | Posted on 2010-03-23 00:00:00 | by raincloud | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't fully understand this. I seems like you are describing a pretty awesome [censored] an even better blowjob, and one very wet pussy.

    or or or

    there's tension here and it's alive, and has some quite startling imagery,

    it's hot in an indirect classy sort of way, and i sort of expect you to get back to me and call me a freak because this is really a teen angst poem, but not even.

    i always click on your name when you show up.

    it's good, really good. i like it.
    | Posted on 2010-03-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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