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    dots Submission Name: The Shards of a Promisedots

    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Broken promises have shattered the earth, the pieces glued together again to make the unstable ground we walk on today.

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    dotsThe Shards of a Promisedots

    of all things broken,
    the shards of a Promise
    claim the highest costs.

    a broken promise
    breaks a heart.
    a broken heart
    breaks another.

    not all the glue in the world
    could put a shattered promise together
    not all the money in the world
    could buy anew, another

    but for the unrepentant the price is always highest

    and a day may come when that Promise
    becomes the woe
    of its maker.


    Submitted on 2010-03-23 09:34:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      At times I feel as though promises are a dangerous gamble because the mystery of what an outcome will be like or what nature will bring on the good, the bad or that ugly mess that is labeled as unkept.

    Somewhere out there at every minute or hour on the hour things revolve around just one promise and if connected to 5 more people through 1 more.That is a chain of promises in human social relativity because the good and the bad of a promise is shown by the relationships and affiliations people have..

    Ouch.I just had a brainfart, I had no intention in mustering that paragraph but yes this is realness.

    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a great thing to write a poem about! I want to comment on the quality of the verse. It is good because it's concise and expressive with figurative language and the lineation chosen for dramatic effect. But it's not so good because somehow it doesn't sing.

    Only my opinion. Some poets despise the lyrical tradition! But the public hear mostly lyrics ... don't they? Un-lyrical verse doesn't read out loud very well ... a lot of free verse is wonderfully musical ... this poem I reckon is about halfway there, since some pairs of lines begin to set up a rhythmic, wailing form, but then it isn't carried out through the poem.
    | Posted on 2011-03-15 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Blew me away! Its straight to the point and full of meaning. I learn from masters such as you. Thumbs up all the way. And ditto on the favored.

    | Posted on 2011-01-23 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      Some things can be mend.....remember that. Nice poem, it spoke to me.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it! The world was once one. But it was chewed up and shattered by cheats and lies. Now us. Now the next generations must crawl through what we once called earth.

    Vice once payed homage to virtue by concealing itself. Now the like between the two is as fine as a hair.

    We know not our limits.

    | Posted on 2010-03-29 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this one; well the idea of it. Broken promises do break a heart, regardless of what they wore. They show a person is a liar, cannot be trusted, and all that sort.

    Anyhow, prepared to be favored.
    | Posted on 2010-03-27 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]

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