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    dots Submission Name: An Ode to the Tallest Buildingdots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       The little soldier clad in blue throws his baton into the air--a spectacle of twirling gold sparkles a moment under the sun before with a snap it falls back into the little soldier's hand--wondering how it could ever had thought it could last in the air forever.


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    dotsAn Ode to the Tallest Buildingdots
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    They think that they can thumb the World
    So they can, but only while the baton twirls.

    Thus we struggle under that notorious Eye
    That invisible Army of ears and minds
    For the merest Truth we are set to flame
    Whether in right or wrong, We are the devils, all the same.

    But we know of What they fear
    And that One can better than any Hear
    His Sight misses nothing done
    His Justice is just and incriminates none
    To Flame will go the devils then
    When the True Life will have begun.

    And they plan, and God plans,
    And Verily! God is the Best of planners.




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    ||| Comments |||
      You know now that i read it again, i dont think its stumbles at all.
    Just the second line

    "So they can, but only while the baton twirls."

    I think it doesnt fit too well but the reat of this write it amazing!

    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-04-02 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is a wonderful peice! It is a little stumbly but the meaning makes up for that

    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-03-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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