Description: I wrote this at the request of a friend of mine's wife when he was dying so if you don't like it don't razz it . I know it might seem overblown and somewhat pompous but I like to think it brought comfort .
Fertile earth's seductive sorcery
Like ephemeral effulgence's effluent effusion
Can lead you to believe that it's not a travesty
Like life's visceral intuitive eternal is not lost in subtle evasive confusion
Life's virile translucence reflects this glow
Like an aorist ensemble of interludes transposition
Can lead you to believe that you're in the know
Like omnipresence presages omniscience's ubiquity is existential exigency's peroration's exposition
Corporeally preternatural metaphysical mystique
Like a mirador bartizan tableau panorama
Can inspire us to rise above its critique
Like spatiotemporal's telemetry incarnate is creation's vivid intrepid cyclorama
Spectral verve's liaison's consortium
Like eclectic synectics conclave's fatidic
Can leave you lost in germane compendium
Like terminus thrall's apriori inclination is transcendental accession's endemic mnemonic
Monad's transitional majestic splendor
Like residual harmonic vibration's resilience
Can autonomously evoke and vicariously render
Like rubato's actuator's prospectus revealed is orchestration rendition's intriguing brilliance
Eidetic preterit's aesthetic amendments
Like protractive analysis's dimensional delineation
Can lead to cogent salacious enticements
Like phantasmagoria's fantasia fantastication's magniloquence is sultry solace's ostentatious ideation
I think you did a good job of using long or more complicated words in a still somewhat precise rhyme and meter. I'm not sure if it was supposed to make sense, although I thought it was supposed to, but when I looked up the words much of it did not make sense to me. My favorite line was "spectral verve's liaison's consortium," which as far as I could tell meant "ghostly vitality's means of communication's association." But I may have placed the wrong definitions on the words you chose. All the same, thanks for sharing this, I enjoyed it.
-Katriana
That is the way to use poetry, and why we do so much seemingly useless playing with it!
I'm still zonked out by your style, but that is not a criticism, it just means I can't comment yet! But I'll stay on it, cos I need to. Nobody else I know is writing like this; I kinda like the look of it!
Hi monad. Thanks for the fav on "Tainted Lady" it is appreciated. The ending do need a more rounding off I agree. Will check it out.
I looked at "Verbose" and do find it a bit heavy weighted and still not quite my field for interpretation. Sorry but I will strain my little mind to the utmost and will still not be able to meet the expectations required to really do justice there. As I am actually not English speaking I find it even difficult to maintain the more common English we as peasants rely on over here. Regards Joachim.
Submission Name: Verbose
