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    dots Submission Name: A whole new concept of dragging your assdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsA whole new concept of dragging your assdots
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    Pffft ! yer alright
    For Christ sake
    I’m coming
    Yes I am

    Sigh

    I know it’s important
    Stop bothering me

    Look
    Really
    All I want to do is sit here and ponder navels
    Not spirituals
    Yer, yer, yer
    So the little voice in my head
    Told me

    Gimme a break

    What ?¿
    You think I have all the time in the world
    To do nothing
    Doing nothing takes time
    Nothing is all consuming

    Oh for pity’s sake please
    Will you stop fucking whining

    Leave me alone
    Stop knocking at the door
    With that bright ‘n shiny doo dad
    You call consciousness
    I want to sleep
    I need to eat
    I think I need at least half a bottle of Jack

    Tell you what
    Tomorrow
    How about tomorrow
    Sound good to you
    We’ll do it mañana
    Ok
    With you
    Manaña is good enough for me

    Hmmmm ?
    Oh for fuck sake
    I thought we’d agreed on this
    Didn’t I explain how tomorrow never comes
    Yes we will
    As soon as I can
    When I’m ready

    What ?¿?¿
    Are you shitting me ?¿?¿

    Oh I see…. Ah …..

    So now you’re really pissed at me

    There is no vengeance you have ever know
    When the vengeance you feel
    Is your own





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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, this piece was very confusing. And explanation would be better to get the reader to kind of at least see sort of where you are comming from.
    | Posted on 2010-03-26 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem kinda confused me but it almost seemed like you were portraying someone who had schizophrenia. It seemed like you were telling your voices to go away. I'm not trying to make fun of your peice but that is what I got from it and I liked it so, yeah.
    | Posted on 2010-03-24 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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