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    dots Submission Name: Id give you my heart,and Id let you just hold itdots
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    Author: TasteMyRainbow
    ASL Info:    17/Male/In your pants.
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 21/22/17
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
    Total Views: 1444
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    Bytes: 971



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    dotsId give you my heart,and Id let you just hold itdots
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    Id give you my heart, and Id let you just hold it.
    Id give you my soul, but I already lost it.
    Today I feel like a balloon, being set free towards the sky.
    I feel like a antelope running free, trying not to die.
    My candle is still lite, and Id like to keep it that way for a while.
    Even if my feet fall out of line, and my clock stops and shatters on the tile.
    The key to my soul is turning slowly,
    Capturing the much needed air to breathe.
    You can open me slightly.
    But not too much, I like to keep hidden till I know for sure the blood has stopped.
    The decapitation has faded, and my head is screwing correctly.
    I cant say Im not running in circles;
    Becaue I still have no idea whats to come next.
    My heads on the platter though.
    You could eat me like a steak
    Or hug me like an otter.



    Jace
    March 25th
    1:24 AM




    Submitted on 2010-03-25 00:35:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're so pretty, Jace. <(^_^)>
    | Posted on 2010-03-25 00:00:00 | by Eyamma | [ Reply to This ]


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