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    dots Submission Name: Cryptic Proufoundly Revolutionary Insightful Poemdots
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    Author: RisingSon
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 7/79/52
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is probably the greatest thing you will ever read, unless you have read any of my other poems.


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    dotsCryptic Proufoundly Revolutionary Insightful Poemdots
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    Cryptic Proufoundly Revolutionary Insightful Poem
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    You were a pick up
    widow
    tied to your senses
    like a heat wave
    dawning
    crawling on fingers
    It was so nice
    single
    times were erasing
    this heart never racing
    no white finish line

    You were a fuck up
    bracing
    head in the rafters
    every morning
    wash out
    burning and cloudless
    Like a sunset
    slowly
    leaving forever
    such simmering weather
    your nighttime reprise




    Submitted on 2010-03-25 10:34:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was incredible. Divine. The writer of the new generation, of the new century, has finally surfaced. I will nominate you for a Nobel prize. Such literary genius should not go unnoticed. I do not hesitate to compare you to acclaimed writers such as Bruce Coville and Brooklyn Wright.
    A delicacy.
    | Posted on 2010-03-27 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it a lot, it's sort of fast paced and then slam on the breaks, it's [censored] ace. dude, for me for you, this was dope.
    | Posted on 2010-03-25 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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