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    dots Submission Name: Green Teadots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 446
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    Description:
       In one of my many english classes we were asked to write of our favorite food. I wouldn't exacly classify Green Tea as food but here it is :) Best stuff on Earth


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    dotsGreen Teadots
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    An invigorating zing of lemon grass rising up in the steamy wisps
    Threading itself up through the space above the cup
    Climbing up and up, then disappearing
    Aromas linger
    Above the golden liquid
    I hold the cup close to my face and inhale its sweet sweet scent
    My hands cradling the warm clay, anticipating the smooth taste of its precious contents
    I bring the edge of the cup towards my quivering lips
    And I tip the cup
    The golden liquid pours over my tongue, taking over my senses with its idyllic taste
    The corners of my mouth curve upward in a small smile
    A sigh
    Bliss




    Submitted on 2010-03-25 11:06:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I must say... i'm not a big fan of green tea really.. but this piece will make anyone wanna try hehhe..
    My favorite thing about this would be that you slowly build up interest in the green tea... and end it with simple words..... bliss... it added that delicate touch in your description ..
    keep it up
    | Posted on 2010-03-25 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]


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