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    dots Submission Name: Emo Kind of Lovedots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsEmo Kind of Lovedots
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    Do you know that empty feeling deep inside your heart?

    Ya know...the kind of feeling you get when your heart falls apart.

    It's the emo kind of love you get when your out on your first date,

    The kind of love you get when your with someone you hate.

    You know the facts aren't good, and you know it won't last that long,

    The reason being that you're a teenager and you r way to young.

    So don't give your hopes up now it won't be a long wait,

    Till sooner or later you'll find your very own mate.

    It's the emo kind of love you get when your true love soon will come!




    Submitted on 2010-03-26 07:57:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the rhyme scheme and I like the feel I get when reading it. Reminds me of many of my ex's. Good job. ^_^
    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by ShadowKyo | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem, it totally describes what I want in life xD
    That emo kind of love ;)
    | Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha totally relatable. The only changes I would make is to turn that 'r' into an 'are' and in the third line it should be "you're". And maybe change the second last line into:

    "'til sooner or later you'll find your own soulmate"

    Using just the word 'mate' reminded me of an animal in the wild looking for a mating partner o_O anyway...

    Ideas requested? Hmm well, maybe explaining what 'emo love' is for those who don't know. Give an example of what it feels like, what you think, how you act, so then the reader can get a better idea of what you are referring to. I see you have already explained it a bit, but I feel there could be more...?

    Creative ideas...
    "That notion of someone you're trying to forget
    Grasping good feelings, letting go of regret"
    It's rough, but that's just a suggestion...

    Interesting how the sub culture evolved from a genre of music.

    Anyway, thanks for sharing (:
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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