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    dots Submission Name: Love Hurtsdots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Hurtsdots
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    When love strikes your back,
    You turn and let it go.
    Watch it turn and fly off as if it never showed,

    Love is never there to help,
    It's always there to hurt,
    It will always let you down,
    As if it just occured.

    If love ever shows up,
    Knocking on your door,
    Tell it to go away,
    You mean nothing to me anymore.

    Watch your true love leave,
    As you close the front door,
    Yell at it very loud,
    You mean nothing any more!




    Submitted on 2010-03-26 08:03:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the personification...

    leave love out there wiping its feet on the welcome mat...don't let it in...

    "it will always let you down/ as if it just occured"

    nice two lines there..

    as i was reading this i was humming Nazareth's "Love Hurts"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Love hurts, but sometimes it's a good hurt and it makes me feel alive.
    Incubus--Love Hurts

    Sad piece about rejecting love, but I completely agree. I know I don't ever want to feel that way again.

    Liking the metaphors with this :D

    Thanks for sharing!
    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      Yep sometimes love stinks. Better luck next time.
    | Posted on 2010-03-26 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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