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Crushed


Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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Crushed



She opened to me like a flower
But I fell on her like a stone
Her heart cried out for love
And instead hate consumed her
Tears ran down the soft cheek
Leaving a salty taste on pink lips
Afraid to fall apart again
Her arms hold herself together
Rivers flow from her eyes
Eyes once full of hope are now
Black as stormy nights at the shore
A thousand shattered pedals
Crumble to the floor
The loving flower once whole
Is no more




Submitted on 2010-03-26 16:48:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think if you choose a couple of words a little more carefully this has great potential. Some of the sayings seem a little trite though. I think if following through on the flower imagery is a great place to start.
| Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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