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    dots Submission Name: Bloody Belladonnadots
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    Author: Monsun
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Berlin Germany
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 17/18/15
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Them
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    dotsBloody Belladonnadots
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    Lets Just collapse
    and let us deny
    Shut out everyone's lie
    Just watch the daylight elapse.

    Drag your nails unto my coffin
    sipping on what you drank last night
    you cant bare to see my slient Sight
    your soul is the same as the virgin

    Untainted
    Forsaken
    Broken
    Blackend

    (Chorus)
    sit in you tree house in the sky
    Who cares if we die
    my life was my lie
    seep down to your knees a cry
    and weep this lie
    When everyone is a plastic pre-madonna
    just hold tightly to your Bloody Belladonna
    (Chorus)

    Atropine hold me back
    I cant hold on much longer
    Allow your love to make me stronger
    Solanine, my visions turning black

    (Chorus)

    Defeated
    Bleeding
    Dying
    Conseded

    Bloody Belladonna
    lift me above the rest
    slowly lay me to my rest
    Fuck all you Pre-madonna




    Submitted on 2010-03-26 22:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting poem, but... "Chorus"??
    | Posted on 2010-03-27 00:00:00 | by Waffaz | [ Reply to This ]


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