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Bloody Belladonna


Author: Monsun
ASL Info:    17/Male/Berlin Germany
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 17 /18 /15
Words: 179
Class/Type: Lyrics /Them
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Bloody Belladonna



Lets Just collapse
and let us deny
Shut out everyone's lie
Just watch the daylight elapse.

Drag your nails unto my coffin
sipping on what you drank last night
you cant bare to see my slient Sight
your soul is the same as the virgin

Untainted
Forsaken
Broken
Blackend

(Chorus)
sit in you tree house in the sky
Who cares if we die
my life was my lie
seep down to your knees a cry
and weep this lie
When everyone is a plastic pre-madonna
just hold tightly to your Bloody Belladonna
(Chorus)

Atropine hold me back
I cant hold on much longer
Allow your love to make me stronger
Solanine, my visions turning black

(Chorus)

Defeated
Bleeding
Dying
Conseded

Bloody Belladonna
lift me above the rest
slowly lay me to my rest
Fuck all you Pre-madonna




Submitted on 2010-03-26 22:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting poem, but... "Chorus"??
| Posted on 2010-03-27 00:00:00 | by Waffaz | [ Reply to This ]


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